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TheUnknownSoulChase
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Female Number of posts : 9
Location : Somewhere In The World Unknown
Registration date : 2009-08-16

PostSubject: Through and through.   Sun Aug 16, 2009 3:56 pm

Falling through all the cracks,
Lifting through the skys of hell,
Flowing through the seas of death,
Hitting through the veins of life,
Coursing through the bones of sickness,
Running through the heart of diseased,
Through and through I always go,
Through and through I'm in the pain,
Through and through I am always moving.
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Anubis
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Location : At a perfect state of peace
Registration date : 2008-10-21

PostSubject: Re: Through and through.   Wed Aug 26, 2009 11:55 am

You could a lot more to this if you added a few more lines to the middle part, but it was really good. I expect to hear more from you.

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TheUnknownSoulChase
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Female Number of posts : 9
Location : Somewhere In The World Unknown
Registration date : 2009-08-16

PostSubject: Re: Through and through.   Tue Sep 01, 2009 5:13 pm

Thank you very much, I wasn't sure if this one was actually good but now I'm sure it's ok. ^^ I am trying to write more.
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