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NECRO
New Poet


Male Number of posts : 5
Location : some place not home
Registration date : 2008-10-23

PostSubject: For You   Sat Nov 01, 2008 11:53 am

You tell me you love me
I believe what you say
You don't like what I do
But its only a few
Where's the wrong?A cut here and there
I'm sorry that last one gave you a scare
I'll try and stop just for you
For you love me and I you
I'd do anything for you
Even if I can't I'll try


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Anubis
Shadow Lord


Male Number of posts : 65
Location : At a perfect state of peace
Registration date : 2008-10-21

PostSubject: Re: For You   Mon Nov 03, 2008 2:37 pm

Not bad write. keep it up, but use more feelings and emotions. Also do I know you???

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Three friends go into battle
One is captured,
One flies away,
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